Ahalya's Story
Within the first few sentences, I am thinking beauty and the beast. Belle and Gaston specifically.
Indra could be a stocker. It is morbid, but this could be a suspenseful rather than a fairytale.
The adultery reminds me of two things. 1. David and Bathsheba 2. The x-man movie where the blue girl changes appearances and sneaks into Wolverines tent as the girl he is interested in.
The body being covered by the female organ is just gross. Guess that would show the world where your thoughts lie for sure.
It would be cool to write and shed light on Ahalya thoughts while she was stone.
Rama reminds me of Jesus sometimes, "let your heart not be burdened with what is past and gone" (pg. 21). Just as Jesus tells the woman from the well, to get up and sin no more.
Ahalya is going to be called Lya for simplicity of me remembering the name and for pronunciation purposes.
Brahma will be Lya's, father/creator. (In the sense of God)
Sage Gautama will be called Sagu in this story. (He will be like a living holy spirit/Jesus)
Indra will be like Kind David from the bible in a sense. He will also be devilish.
I would like to map the story out as follows...
Brahma creates and loves (like a daughter) Lya. He realizes the world and the things in it are corrupt and disgusting, so he sends her to be with Sagu. Sagu protects her as well as gives her a sense of peace, joy, and understanding from right/wrong.
One day when Lya is old enough to make decisions on her own because Sagu has taught her and guided her well, but her father sees she is in good hands and wants her to stay with Sagu.
Lya will grow up and live in a village having a nice life, she even has a crush on a boy in the village.
Indra will be a married man.
In the middle of the story, Indra will see Lya bathing on her rooftop. Indra will be overfilled with temptation and approach Lya.
Indra appears in the shape of Lya's crush from the village professing his love for her and his desire to be with her.
Lya will be flattered, and they will have relations. A village friend accidentally will barge in and see what is happening. She will freak about the relations causing Lya to see clearly. She will see past Indra's disguise. Indra will flee, but the woman will drag Lya out to the city center where she will be surrounded by all the city folk. They are all ready to kill her or exile her or something.
Sagu will walk upon the incident convicting all the bystanders of their wrong doings, getting Lya off the hook, and pushing her on to a better life telling her that if she were ever to do something foolish like that again, it is possible she would be turned to stone for the rest of her life.
Then Lya will go, and the story will end.
Please note the things in red were my reading notes.
Narayan, R. K. (1972). The Ramayana: a shortened modern prose version of the Indian epic. Penguin.http://iereadingguides.blogspot.com/2015/05/week-1-of-2-narayans-ramayana-reading.html
English Standard Version. Bible Gateway. Web. 25 Jan. 2017
Ahalya is going to be called Lya for simplicity of me remembering the name and for pronunciation purposes.
Brahma will be Lya's, father/creator. (In the sense of God)
Sage Gautama will be called Sagu in this story. (He will be like a living holy spirit/Jesus)
Indra will be like Kind David from the bible in a sense. He will also be devilish.
I would like to map the story out as follows...
Brahma creates and loves (like a daughter) Lya. He realizes the world and the things in it are corrupt and disgusting, so he sends her to be with Sagu. Sagu protects her as well as gives her a sense of peace, joy, and understanding from right/wrong.
One day when Lya is old enough to make decisions on her own because Sagu has taught her and guided her well, but her father sees she is in good hands and wants her to stay with Sagu.
Lya will grow up and live in a village having a nice life, she even has a crush on a boy in the village.
Indra will be a married man.
In the middle of the story, Indra will see Lya bathing on her rooftop. Indra will be overfilled with temptation and approach Lya.
Indra appears in the shape of Lya's crush from the village professing his love for her and his desire to be with her.
Lya will be flattered, and they will have relations. A village friend accidentally will barge in and see what is happening. She will freak about the relations causing Lya to see clearly. She will see past Indra's disguise. Indra will flee, but the woman will drag Lya out to the city center where she will be surrounded by all the city folk. They are all ready to kill her or exile her or something.
Sagu will walk upon the incident convicting all the bystanders of their wrong doings, getting Lya off the hook, and pushing her on to a better life telling her that if she were ever to do something foolish like that again, it is possible she would be turned to stone for the rest of her life.
Then Lya will go, and the story will end.
Image Information: David and Bathsheba
Bathsheba bathing on the roof by Louis-Jean-François Lagrenée
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You seem to have a great plan for your story. I can't wait to read it! What I find most intriguing is the idea of deception. I think that is something that you are going to nail, based on your planning. The idea of punishment for Lya is also a nice touch to the story.
ReplyDeleteI really like what you have planned out for this story. I think your series of events seems very fluid and I like the general story line. I also thought your reading notes about the x-man movie were spot on! I didn’t think about that but once you said it I totally got it. I think this will make a great story when you write it next week!
ReplyDeleteThis is really cool! It’s clear that you’ve put a lot of thought into the story that you want to write. I love how you’re drawing on a lot of the other media you’ve taken in to craft an entirely new story around the framework of the Ramayana. It’s made especially interesting by the fact that you’re mixing a lot of old media with a lot of new media. I never would have thought to mix the Ramayana and the Bible with Beauty and the Beast and the X-men. Way to go! Super creative!
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